Poetry Form: Examples of Harry Gilliland's Storoem

In the post on August first, poet and author Harry Gilleland explained
what a storoem is. Today I present two examples of storoems from his
newest poetry book, Poetic Musings of an Old, Fat Man.


Guarded By Lions

From Addis Ababa, Ethiopia, comes this report
of a twelve-year-old girl abducted by seven men.
One man wanted to wed her, but she refused to court.
The men stole her away, determined to beat her then.

For there, young girls are often severely battered
and raped to make them accept an unwanted marriage.
This girl was repeatedly beaten, left blood-splattered
and whimpering in pain…of justice, a true miscarriage.

After a week an unlikely trio of saviors happened by.
Three male lions, their thick, black manes resplendent
in the African sun, chased away the men, who didn’t try
to save the girl but abandoned her to her fate attendant.

She lay before the lions -- a defenseless, easy meal.
But, and many call it a miracle, the lions did her no harm.
Instead they stood guard over her, a happening surreal.
Half a day the lions watched and waited, ready to disarm

any danger that approached her. True guardians they were!
When rescuers arrived, the lions turned and walked away
with no look back. These unlikely saviors became but a blur
as they disappeared, leaving behind wonderment this day.

Authorities explained the girl’s whimpering had possibly
sounded like the mewing of a lion cub, keeping her safe.
Male lions kill cubs they did not sire; her scent would ably
make her human -- all logical explanations merely chafe…

…maybe miracles truly do occur due to the hand of fate.


A Soldier’s Goodbye

It’s a scene oft repeated throughout history,
from Greeks sailing away to faraway Troy,
Romans marching off to lands of mystery,
continuing today whenever troops deploy.

A soldier must say goodbye to his loved ones,
be it his parents, his girlfriend, or his mate.
He’ll soon encounter explosions and guns,
with his destiny placed in the hands of Fate.

His loved one hugs him tightly, with tears
streaming: “I love you. Come back to me.”
The soldier acts brave, camouflaging his fears.
Neither knows what the outcome will be.

He must join his unit; his wife says, “Wait!”
She clings, fearing never again seeing him alive.
Reluctantly, he pulls away: “You’ll make me late.
Don’t worry, dear. I promise you that I’ll survive.”

Now all assembled, the warriors set off to war
with hearts heavy, yet ready to answer the call.
Leaving loved ones is something they abhor…
homecoming will be sweet, if they return after all.

PS: Please find an explanation of storoem on this blog's August 1 post. That post also serves os an example of how poets can contribute to literature and use their contribution to promote poetry and their own art.

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These storoem and others were published March, 2008: "Poetic Musings of an Old, Fat Man", a new collection of poetry and a 2008 Reader Views Literary Award winner (Honorable Mention in Fiction, Poetry category).


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Carolyn Howard-Johnson, author of This Is the Place; Harkening: A Collection of Stories Remembered; Tracings, a chapbook of poetry; and two how to books for writers, The Frugal Book Promoter: How To Do What Your Publisher Won't and The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success. Her FRUGAL book for retailers is A Retailer’s Guide to Frugal In-Store Promotions: How To Increase Profits and Spit in the Eyes of Economic Downturns with Thrifty Events and Sales Techniques. She is also the author of the Amazon Short, "The Great First Impression Book Proposal". Some of her other blogs are TheNewBookReview.blogspot.com, a blog where authors can recycle their favorite reviews. She also blogs at all things editing, grammar, formatting and more at The Frugal, Smart and Tuned-In Editor blog.

Poetry Form: Examples of Harry Gilleland's Storoem

In the post on August first, poet and author Harry Gilleland explained
what a storoem is. Today I present two examples of storoems from his
newest poetry book, Poetic Musings of an Old, Fat Man.


Guarded By Lions

From Addis Ababa, Ethiopia, comes this report
of a twelve-year-old girl abducted by seven men.
One man wanted to wed her, but she refused to court.
The men stole her away, determined to beat her then.

For there, young girls are often severely battered
and raped to make them accept an unwanted marriage.
This girl was repeatedly beaten, left blood-splattered
and whimpering in pain…of justice, a true miscarriage.

After a week an unlikely trio of saviors happened by.
Three male lions, their thick, black manes resplendent
in the African sun, chased away the men, who didn’t try
to save the girl but abandoned her to her fate attendant.

She lay before the lions -- a defenseless, easy meal.
But, and many call it a miracle, the lions did her no harm.
Instead they stood guard over her, a happening surreal.
Half a day the lions watched and waited, ready to disarm

any danger that approached her. True guardians they were!
When rescuers arrived, the lions turned and walked away
with no look back. These unlikely saviors became but a blur
as they disappeared, leaving behind wonderment this day.

Authorities explained the girl’s whimpering had possibly
sounded like the mewing of a lion cub, keeping her safe.
Male lions kill cubs they did not sire; her scent would ably
make her human -- all logical explanations merely chafe…

…maybe miracles truly do occur due to the hand of fate.


A Soldier’s Goodbye

It’s a scene oft repeated throughout history,
from Greeks sailing away to faraway Troy,
Romans marching off to lands of mystery,
continuing today whenever troops deploy.

A soldier must say goodbye to his loved ones,
be it his parents, his girlfriend, or his mate.
He’ll soon encounter explosions and guns,
with his destiny placed in the hands of Fate.

His loved one hugs him tightly, with tears
streaming: “I love you. Come back to me.”
The soldier acts brave, camouflaging his fears.
Neither knows what the outcome will be.

He must join his unit; his wife says, “Wait!”
She clings, fearing never again seeing him alive.
Reluctantly, he pulls away: “You’ll make me late.
Don’t worry, dear. I promise you that I’ll survive.”

Now all assembled, the warriors set off to war
with hearts heavy, yet ready to answer the call.
Leaving loved ones is something they abhor…
homecoming will be sweet, if they return after all.

PS: Please find an explanation of storoem on this blog's August 1 post. That post also serves os an example of how poets can contribute to literature and use their contribution to promote poetry and their own art.--
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These storoem and others were published March, 2008: "Poetic Musings of an Old, Fat Man", a new collection of poetry and a 2008 Reader Views Literary Award winner (Honorable Mention in Fiction, Poetry category).

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Carolyn Howard-Johnson, author of This Is the Place; Harkening: A Collection of Stories Remembered; Tracings, a chapbook of poetry; and two how to books for writers, The Frugal Book Promoter: How To Do What Your Publisher Won't and The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success. Her FRUGAL book for retailers is A Retailer’s Guide to Frugal In-Store Promotions: How To Increase Profits and Spit in the Eyes of Economic Downturns with Thrifty Events and Sales Techniques. She is also the author of the Amazon Short, "The Great First Impression Book Proposal". Some of her other blogs are TheNewBookReview.blogspot.com, a blog where authors can recycle their favorite reviews. She also blogs at all things editing, grammar, formatting and more at The Frugal, Smart and Tuned-In Editor blog.

Seven Easy Ways to Keep Dialogue Sharp

This blog post is a bit of a celebration. Apparently this month Sharing with Writers blog was named to Writers Digest 101 Best Resources or something similar. I am being vague because I haven't seen; I've only heard about it from friends who are happy to pass on good news. So, I got to thinking that people might want to know something of the kind of fare they will find on my other blog, The Frugal, Smart and Tuned-In Editor at www.thefrugaleditor.blogspot.com. You'll find articles there, questions and answers and lots of discussions on the differences between rules and style choices.

Seven Easy Ways to Keep Dialogue Sharp

By Carolyn Howard-Johnson
Author of The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success

1. Keep it simple. "He said" and "She said" will usually do. Your reader is trained to accept this repetition.

2. Forget you ever heard of strong verbs. Skip the "He yelped" and the "She sighed." They slow your dialogue down. If you feel need them, look at the words—the actual dialogue— your character used when he was yelping. Maybe it doesn't reflect the way someone would sound if he yelped. Maybe if you strengthen the dialogue, you can ditch the overblown tag.

3. When you can, reveal who is saying something by the voice or tone of the dialogue. That way you may be able to skip tags occasionally, especially when you have only two people speaking to one another. Your dialogue will ring truer, too.

4. Avoid having characters use other characters' names. In real life, we don't use people's names in our speech much. We tend to reserve using names for when we're angry or disapproving or we just met in a room full of people and we're practicing out social skills. Having a character direct her speech to one character or another by using her name is a lazy writer's way of directing dialogue and it will annoy the reader. When a reader is annoyed, she will not be immersed in the story you are trying to tell.

5. Avoid putting internal dialogue in italics. Trust your reader. She will know who is thinking the words from the point of view of the narrative.

6. Be cautious about using dialogue to tell something that should be shown. It doesn't help much to transfer telling from the narrator to the dialogue. It just makes the character who is speaking sound long winded. Putting quotation marks around exposition won't draw the reader into the scene or involve him more than if you'd left it part of the narrative.

7. And magic number seven is, don't break up dialogue sequences with long or overly frequent blocks of narrative. One of dialogue's greatest advantages is that it moves a story along. If a writer inserts too much stage direction, it will lose the forward motion and any tension it is building.

For more on writing dialogue check out Tom Chiarella's Writing Dialogue (Writers' Digest) and for more on editing in general—from editing query letters to turning unattractive adverbs into metaphoric gold—find The Frugal Editor: Put Your Best Book Forward to Avoid Humiliation and Ensure Success (Red Engine Press) on Amazon.
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Carolyn Howard-Johnson is an instructor for the UCLA Extension Writer's Program. The first book in her HowToDoItFrugally Series of books, The Frugal Book Promoter, won USA Book News' Best Professional Book Award and Book Publicists of Southern California's Irwin Award. The second, The Frugal Editor, is also a USA Book News winner as well as a Reader Views Litary Award winner and the campaign for that book was named Best Marketing by the New Generation Indie Awards committee. It includes many editing tips on dialogue, the use of quotation marks and more. Learn more at www.howtodoitfrugally.com . This article is available for republishing on the Articles4Writers,Editors page.